概要：评析这篇文章切题，条理基本清楚，前后也还连贯。作者基本上能表达自己的意思，读者也基本上能看懂。但是，该考生对英语语法和词汇的掌握还需要进一步提高，文章中句子结构上的严重错误较多，有明显的按中文语序造句的痕迹。如：1． 第1段最后一句so this time we can spend the holiday together will make me so happy中主语从句this time we can spend the holiday together缺了连接词that，正确的结构应该是(The fact) that we can spend the holiday together this time will make me so happy。当然，如果能改成It makes me very happy to think that we can spend the holiday together this time就更好了。2． 第2段第3句You will surely superise the changes应改为Y
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这篇文章切题，条理基本清楚，前后也还连贯。作者基本上能表达自己的意思，读者也基本上能看懂。但是，该考生对英语语法和词汇的掌握还需要进一步提高，文章中句子结构上的严重错误较多，有明显的按中文语序造句的痕迹。如：
1． 第1段最后一句so this time we can spend the holiday together will make me so happy
中主语从句this time we can spend the holiday together缺了连接词that，正确的结构应该是(The fact) that we can spend the holiday together this time will make me so happy。当然，如果能改成It makes me very happy to think that we can spend the holiday together this time就更好了。
2． 第2段第3句You will surely superise the changes应改为You will surely be surprised at
the changes。 surprise的意思是“使惊奇”，所以，原文的意思变成“你将肯定令变化惊奇”，而不是“你将肯定对变化感到吃惊”，这样说就不通了。而且在surprise这样的复用式单词上出现了拼写错误。
3． 第2段倒数第2句The time table of visit we can make when you come的次序不符合
英语的习惯，应改成We can make / set up a timetable when you come。
另外，该考生在词的拼写、大小写、名词的单复数以及介词的用法上也出现了各种各
样的错误，说明其英语语言基础还不够扎实，不够全面，还需要相当大的努力才能赶上。
先将原文作适当修改，供读者参考：
I’m very glad that you will come to see me during the weeklong holiday。 We have not seen each other for two years。 It makes me very happy to think that we can spend the holiday together this time。
Shanghai has changed a lot since you left it two years ago。 The city is more beautiful and new high-rises are springing up everywhere。 You will surely be surprised / amazed at the changes。 I have made some arrangements for your holiday。 We can go shopping in Nanjing Road， which is the business center of Shanghai。 We can go to the People’s Square and visit the History Museum。 We can also visit Jinmao Building， which is the highest building in China。 Many other new and wonderful places are also worth visiting。 We can set up a timetable when you come。 What do you think of it ?
By the way， you should telephone me before you set off for Shanghai。 I will meet you at the railway station。 I’m looking forward to your arrival。
5 points
I have known you will come to Shanghai。 Three years ago， you went to the England。 From then， we haven’t meet with each other。 I welcome that you can return your country。
From your letter， I have known you have a week-long holiday。 There is a great change in Shanghai。 I think you must be feel surprised with what you see。 So I advise you visit some place， that we often went ago。 And you can visit some old-classmates。 They also mise you very much。
If you don’t want to hotel， you can live in my home。 You’d better buy a map。 I’m afraid you will be at a lost。 But even if you can’t find bus stop， you still can go to anywhere by taxi。 I hope you will have an unforgetable holiday。
评析
这篇作文虽也基本切题，但由于语言错误很多，且多为严重错误，使得作者无法把思想表达清楚，文章的连贯性自然也很差，只能得5分。像这样的考生，在写的能力上与大纲要求还有相当大的距离，须花大气力迎头赶上。
2 points
I’m very happy for your coming。
It’s time for us to visit Shanghai。 We can go to popular-squire。 It has been great changed since you visited last time。 You will surprise for its beauty。 Then we can visit Shang Museum。 That is interstring。 And you can go to Nanjin-road。 It is very boom and you can shopping there。 We will play very happily during the week-long holiday。
You don’t forget to dail me。 And tell me what’s the data， time you coming， where I can pick up your。 Don’t carry any-thing because I have ready for all。 When coming， you should stay station or we will miss。 Remember all above。