概要：在海里游泳【内容提示】炎热的夏天，你去青岛旅行。一天下午，你去海滨避暑，第一次在海水里游泳。看到大浪，听到涛声，起初你有些害怕。但当看见一个弱小的男孩向大海游去时，你感到害臊。受到小男孩的鼓舞，你向前游去，经受了狂涛大浪的洗礼。【作文示范】Swimming in the SeaIt was in hot summer that I took a trip to Qingdao， a port city in Shandong Province， One afternoon， I decided to go to the seaside to get relief ① from the heat。 For the first time in my life， I swam in the sea。At first， I was worried because though I was not a bad swimmer in the swimming pool， the sea was different。 The waves coming one
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【内容提示】
炎热的夏天，你去青岛旅行。一天下午，你去海滨避暑，第一次在海水里游泳。看到大浪，听到涛声，起初你有些害怕。但当看见一个弱小的男孩向大海游去时，你感到害臊。受到小男孩的鼓舞，你向前游去，经受了狂涛大浪的洗礼。
【作文示范】
Swimming in the Sea
It was in hot summer that I took a trip to Qingdao， a port city in Shandong Province， One afternoon， I decided to go to the seaside to get relief ① from the heat。 For the first time in my life， I swam in the sea。
At first， I was worried because though I was not a bad swimmer in the swimming pool， the sea was different。 The waves coming one after another to the shore made a great noise and I thought they were going to swallow me up。 I was terrified。 Cautiously ② and slowly， I went close to the water。 How cold it was! I was just about to give it up when I suddenly caught sight of a small boy who was about a head shorter than me。 Weak as he seemed， he went straight into the sea without hesitation。 I felt a little ashamed。“What a timid ③ girl I am!”I said to myself。
Encouraged by his bravery ④， I continued advancing。 Soon all of my body was covered by water。 Before I got ready for a dive， a wave came over。 It struck my face heavily and the water went into my eyes， nose and mouth。 How bitter and salty it tasted! But I was not discouraged at all。 I wiped off the water on my face， took a deep breath， and began swimming happily。
The waves became larger and larger， as if the sea was angry with me。 When I saw a wave in the distance， I would hold my breath， and just before it came to where I was， I jumped up and easily kept myself from it。 How exciting! I was just like lying on the clouds!
All that afternoon， I swam and jumped and had a very good time。 When finally I had to leave， I took a last look at the sea。 The waves were still beating the shore， but I was no longer frightened。 “I must thank that little boy，”I said to myself。“It was he who gave me the courage。”
【词语解释】
①relief [ri＇li:f] n。 减轻；解除
②cautiously [＇k&:M+sli] ad。 谨慎地；细心地
③timid [＇timid] a。 胆怯的；缺乏自信心的
④bravery [＇breiv+ri] n。 勇敢；大胆
【写法指要】
1）本文作者写了她第一次在海里游泳的情况。但是，她主要不是叙述自己如何游泳，而是描写她由胆怯到勇敢，甚至敢于与惊涛骇浪争高下的转变过程。
2）作者在文中使用了拟人和明喻两种修辞格：前者如“…swallow me up…。”和“…as if the sea was angry with me…。”，后者如“It was just like lying on the clouds。”。此外，有些句型如“… be just about to do…when…。”，“Weak as he seemed…。”用得很好，值得借鉴。